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Sehrat2013-P6-couleur

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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

i love the line work and the balance of spot color/grey/black (especially love the use of reds in the background/sky).

my single nit-pick is about panel number 2 ~ if you are going to do the blur effect, you could maybe move it off-center of the character's crotch; otherwise it creates a weird focal point. this is emphasized by the fact that the two panels (2 & 3) are exact matches (which always screams cut & paste and makes me look even more critically at the image). if you are going to do a cut & paste, perhaps play with the sizes of the images which might be more interesting to the eyes and also solve the crotch problem. unless, of course, you don't think the crotch is a problem ~ ha!

take anything i say with many grains of salt ~ i offer this small critique as a student learning the art from others who already have a very strong grasp of sequential storytelling.

and i am sorry my french is not good enough to write, so hopefully english is okay.